I'm not a lyricist... but I need lyrics.

Discussion in 'Creative Writing' started by Miz Erie, Feb 15, 2013.

  1. Miz Erie

    Miz Erie Black Mariah Staff Member

    So I'm rewriting Sing, Pretty to have it published... which means I have to write three songs to replace the one My Chem and two Pencey Prep songs.

    I finally got the first one written. I'd kind of like to know what you all think of it. This one is replacing "Trying to Escape the Inevitable."


    Yesterday's Pain Is Tomorrow's Hope

    I can’t keep trying
    Using every part of me
    Just to keep dying
    Never being truly free

    Why did the day before yesterday
    Not tell me what was coming
    Why did I not have a little say
    In what is soon my undoing

    But tomorrow, tomorrow comes anyway
    Taking all my pain away
    And tomorrow, tomorrow is all I know
    I beg to not be told no.

    I can’t stay right here
    Ripping up my aching soul
    To live in my fear
    Never being in control

    How could all the sorrow left behind
    Allow love from all the hate
    How could I be so utterly blind
    To all that is my painful fate

    But tomorrow, tomorrow comes anyway
    Taking all my pain away
    And tomorrow, tomorrow is all I know
    I beg to not be told no.

    Have I ever seen tomorrow
    Or is heartbreak all there is
    Will I ever see tomorrow
    Can the next day really come

    Heartbreak is all I’ve ever known
    Can love can kill my pain
    Heartbreak is all I’ve ever known
    But love can kill my pain
    Your love can kill my pain

    And tomorrow, tomorrow comes anyway
    Taking all my pain away
    And tomorrow, tomorrow is all I know
    I beg to not be told no.

    I beg to not be told no
    I beg to not be told no
    I beg to not be told no

    Please don't say no
    Please don't say no
    No, no, no, no


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    I have no idea what the melody would be for this. I simply wrote lyrics. And I feel like they are kind of basic in pattern, but I tried.

    I would like honestly, but please be nice with what you say. It is the first song I've ever written.
     
  2. SilentRevenge

    SilentRevenge Member

    I like it, Miz. You definitely get that sense of hope. I'm not a lyricist either, even though I write songs when I get the time. But I think you've got something there. It is simple, but sometimes I find that with a certain song you need simple. That way you can get the exact meaning of what the writer intended and not have to go digging through it and come up with your own opinion. It's great for someone's first ever written song. :)
     
  3. Miz Erie

    Miz Erie Black Mariah Staff Member

    ^Thank you! I tried to make it a bit vague--so it could actually be a song--but still fit the story.
     
  4. TheLivingDead

    TheLivingDead Member

    That is wonderful for your first song, Miz. I think it really fits the story, but really could be a real song. I wish I were better at melodies because I'd really like to hear how this would sound.
     
  5. XxPatchie97xX

    XxPatchie97xX Member

    It's cool! Kind of reminds me of "Yesterday" by Pencey Prep. :D
     

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